Sunday, July 22, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday, July 22




This is a continuation of my story set in Playa Del Carmen, Mexico. The heroine, Ally, is trying to work up the nerve to go talk to two good-looking guys at a cabana bar. Her traveling companion is her best friend, an attractive model who has a boyfriend back home. Ally wants her friend to approach the guys with her, but her friend wants no part of it and has urged Ally to approach the guys on her own. Ally's just a tad insecure for that:

When her beautiful friend accompanied her, few guys looked twice at Ally.
On the upside, if she went over there to chat these guys up by herself, she would have their undivided attention.
On the downside, if she went over there to chat these guys up by herself, she would have their undivided attention.
She wasn't fat, she knew that much. She just wasn't skinny. Her doctor had once described her as a "strong, solid woman," which made her feel like a cross between a dairy maid from a Thomas Hardy novel and a roller derby chick.
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12 comments:

Jess Schira said...

Poor Ally, it's tough being friends with a stunning person. I bet that she's prettier than she thinks but just needs an infusion of confidence. I do like the description she gives of herself. Very creative and organic sounding. Great job!

Donna Cummings said...

LOL -- wonderful! I love her sense of humor. Can't wait to see what she does next. :)

K.E. Saxon said...

LOL! Good thing she's not trying to date the doc! I'm dying to see how these guys actually react to her. Great six!!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Poor Ally! Duckling to swan!

Joanne Stewart said...

I love this. I love heroines who are average, almost plane Jane's, and I love that she's insecure about herself. Makes her very real. Great six.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I love how the character is 'real'. Not many of us are runway models. The insecurities are ones a person can relate to. Loved the six!

Sarah W said...

So relatable!

'Course, it would be even worse if she went over there, and they didn't notice at all.

Gale Martin said...

Very fun. (I can relate--to both wanting and not wanting all the attentions of men!)

karladoyle said...

I feel like I'm right there, inside her head. Great snippet!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Ah but beautiful is subjective. Nice six.

Wildcat's Wife said...

Funny description of her! Dairy Maid -- LOL.

Teresa Cypher said...

I love it! "... a cross between a dairy maid from a Thomas Hardy novel and a roller derby chick." So real. What woman couldn't relate!

Great scene--great six. :-)

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