Sunday, May 1, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday, May 1

A scene from the contemporary romance I'm currently shopping to agents, By Hook or By Crook. Things aren't going so well between my heroine, Ivy, and her hero, Joe: 

He didn't want to look at her.
Joe did that a lot, she realized. He excelled at creating distance between them when he didn't want to be reached. This is how it felt to want something really, really bad that you can never have. If she were Daisy, she would say it sucked, big-time. She wasn't Daisy, so she rose and walked away, waiting until she was safe alone in her room to let a few quiet tears fall.


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13 comments:

Cate Masters said...

Poor Ivy. Poignant scene. Best of luck with your sub.

Sandra Sookoo said...

aww, so sad. Best wishes on the sub!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Oh, nos. Will they bridge that distance between them?

Good luck with your sub!

Carolyn Rosewood said...

Great snippet!

sassyspeaks said...

hate it when they don't communicate

Sarah Grimm said...

Poor Ivy. Nicely done! Fingers crossed for you on the submission.

Rebecca Royce said...

Really well done, you really set the scene!

Susanna Fraser said...

Nice six--the straightforward description makes the emotion come through all the more powerfully.

Jayel Kaye said...

Wanting what you can't have...sucks bigtime and creates wonderful tension

Lindsay said...

I feel sorry for her and hope that Joe gets what he deserves

Joanne Stewart said...

Great emotional snippet. I felt for her as well.

AllureVanSanz said...

Very sad. Well done.

Best,
Allure Van Sanz

Gem Sivad said...

Very poignant. Nice six!

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